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	<title>Comments on: Writing To Be Read #2: Keep Shoptalk in the Shop</title>
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		<title>By: Ellie</title>
		<link>http://waterwordsthatwork.com/2007/08/09/water-blog-ely-guest-column/comment-page-1/#comment-1099</link>
		<dc:creator>Ellie</dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Sun, 12 Aug 2007 06:29:46 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>Exactly right -- they stop reading. And once that happens, it doesn&#039;t matter what you wrote, does it? 

One problem is that people get so comfortable with the lingo of their own particular field that they don&#039;t realize what it sounds like to outsiders. A good reminder is to read somebody else&#039;s shoptalk. Here&#039;s an example from the field of ecology: &quot;Different spatial and temporal domains of causality combine to produce local community patterns.&quot; How many non-ecologists would keep reading an article that started out like that?</description>
		<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p>Exactly right &#8212; they stop reading. And once that happens, it doesn&#8217;t matter what you wrote, does it? </p>
<p>One problem is that people get so comfortable with the lingo of their own particular field that they don&#8217;t realize what it sounds like to outsiders. A good reminder is to read somebody else&#8217;s shoptalk. Here&#8217;s an example from the field of ecology: &#8220;Different spatial and temporal domains of causality combine to produce local community patterns.&#8221; How many non-ecologists would keep reading an article that started out like that?</p>
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		<title>By: Natalie</title>
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		<dc:creator>Natalie</dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Fri, 10 Aug 2007 21:31:05 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>Thank you!  I love this and will pass it on to others who really need to hear this message, from someone other than me.  

I have trouble communicating the importance of this to some of my colleagues.  They think that a â€œdumbed downâ€ version of something does not come off as informed and authoritative.  I always say, if people canâ€™t understand something, they stop reading.</description>
		<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p>Thank you!  I love this and will pass it on to others who really need to hear this message, from someone other than me.  </p>
<p>I have trouble communicating the importance of this to some of my colleagues.  They think that a â€œdumbed downâ€ version of something does not come off as informed and authoritative.  I always say, if people canâ€™t understand something, they stop reading.</p>
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		<title>By: Ellie</title>
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		<dc:creator>Ellie</dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Thu, 09 Aug 2007 23:41:40 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>Yes! -- I totally agree that the time it takes to write smart is often undervalued. One of my favorite quotes: &quot;What is easy to read has been difficult to write&quot; (G.M. Trevelyan)</description>
		<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p>Yes! &#8212; I totally agree that the time it takes to write smart is often undervalued. One of my favorite quotes: &#8220;What is easy to read has been difficult to write&#8221; (G.M. Trevelyan)</p>
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		<title>By: Sylvia Tognetti</title>
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		<dc:creator>Sylvia Tognetti</dc:creator>
		<pubDate>Thu, 09 Aug 2007 20:09:48 +0000</pubDate>
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		<description>I use &quot;dumb it down&quot; when critical meaning is sacrificed in the process, because somebody didn&#039;t take the time to write smart, or didn&#039;t get the point to begin with.  Thank you for writing this column as the extra time this takes is often overlooked and undervalued - as are writers who take the time to do it.</description>
		<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p>I use &#8220;dumb it down&#8221; when critical meaning is sacrificed in the process, because somebody didn&#8217;t take the time to write smart, or didn&#8217;t get the point to begin with.  Thank you for writing this column as the extra time this takes is often overlooked and undervalued &#8211; as are writers who take the time to do it.</p>
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